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      Bear…. Wolf, eagle. Always these beasts could turn the hunter into prey. Hurron knew this, it was a knowledge his father taught him well on his first bleeding of the snow.
      Up in the cold you keep these three rulers in mind at all times, especially at the winters end, for wolf is still rabid with winters hunger. Bear awakens from its slumber sharing the same thought as the wolf, and northern eagles, they are always a threat. In time, they learned to wound their prey and watch it bleed to death. Yes, three ruled the mountains, but on the day of bleeding of the snow, they were all prey
      Hurron pretended to be sleeping, while he watched his son standing guard by the fire. Boy has grown strong, stronger than the old wives of the village have foreseen. However, that was not surprising. Hurron never looked kindly on the self-proclaimed prophets. Fate is what one makes of it, and his son was the living breathing proof of it.
      He watched as his son swiftly grabbed his sword when a noise sounded beyond fire's reach. The boy was scared. Fear is good thought Hurron to himself. It will keep your eyes open in the dark of the night. Panic is what will end your life and through squinting eyes Hurron was pleased to see that his sons face bore a determined, agile look.
      Winter was at its end in the mountains, but its bite was still in the air as even an old hunter like Hurron felt its grasp. No matter, the dawn was fast approaching as a brilliant light framed the peaks of Rurda. Bear peaks they called them, for hunters saw in Rurda a giant bear's claw, and it was there that Gammur will bleed the snow. There he will slay a black bear of his own, and be named a hunter.
      Still, Rurda is two days away by foot, and there is still the steep path by the abyss, the ravine of the old times. Old things live at its bottom, so the legends say. Whispers of the old world can be heard by those who learn to listen. Hurron walked along the abyss that seemed to split the world in two, but all he ever heard was the relentless howling of the wind echoing in the deep. Spirits and gods never answered his calls so Hurron learned long ago that the dangers of the world came in flesh and blood, bearing claws, fangs, and blades.  These he knew how to deal with, and soon, so will Gammur.
      Light of the dawn reached their valley as Hurron stretched noisily, startling Gammur slightly.  Hurron noticed the speed with which his son turned towards him, with sword ever so slightly leaving the hilt.
Hurron smiled. You have a hunter's speed boy. Good, you will need it when you face your bear.  Gammur looked down on his sword thoughtfully.
Volkan was a better swordsman that I am and he died last year he said with the air of a man who has been carrying a troublesome burden for a while
Hurron was silent. He took a piece of dried meat and cut off a slice. He stabbed the slice with his knife and kept it over the fire. then he spoke
Volkan was an arrogant fool, he may have been good with the sword but he lacked the most important weapon of the hunter.
Gammur observed his father's grim face with a questioning look.
Hurron took a bite of dried meat chewing in silence for a moment.
Gammur observed his father with a questioning look
Hurron swallowed and washed the meat down with herbwater, and then he continued
Volkan took Idro and Taru to the cave, but instead of being smart and luring the bear out or setting a trap, they decided to fight the bear in his territory. Three idiots entered that cave, and only one made it out. They deserved their fate Gammur, they were fools and the most important weapon a hunter has is a keen mind.
Now, listen to me well Gammur. As a hunter, you must never, and I mean never, underestimate the animal. Respect it; be aware of its strength, its speed and its cunning. You are dueling centuries of that beast's ancestry. They are wise. never forget that. It is primal knowledge, wisdom of the mountains, high places, deep places, and dark places. You are entering their grounds, an there the animal is an opponent you must respect or die by your own foolishness
Gammur looked down at his sword once more in silence, sheathed it and looked resolutely at his father, smiled a bit, and then they ate the rest of the breakfast in silence.

      Night had retreated by the time they packed up their makeshift camp and carried on towards the ravine path that went along the east side of the abyss. For hours, they walked until the forests retreated before the grim wasteland. Land was barren, plains of little to no color waiting for the spring that was fast approaching.
      Soon the food would be bountiful, and hunters will waste no time. They will fill the ice pits with meat, ice there never melts, not even   during the warmest summers. Yes, Hurron thought to himself, there will be work to do, and Gammur will join him then as a man of the tribe.
      They walked the plains for hours, and the noon was behind them when they reached the abyss. It stood before them, gaping, immense, and bottomless.  Old tales call it cleave of the first. For this was the place where the first planted his axe and let loose all the life that was resting in the deeps
      Hurron never placed much worth on the tales of old. Hunter must keep his legs firmly planted on the ground. Hunters mind must be clean of all distractions. One who thinks too much of spirits, hags, and whispers from the deep, will start seeing such things where none exist.  No, there are real dangers in this world. Hurron and Gammur walked down the winding path along the edge of the ravine in silence, listening to the howling of the wind in the deep. Gammur glanced at his father nervously.
Hurron laughed suddenly. Your mother has been filling your ears with old tales I reckon.
Gammur said nothing.
Hurron looked at his son for a moment and then continued in good spirits.
Come boy, let us have a look into the abyss, let us see if the spirits of the deep will look back at us.
Gammur hesitated for a moment and then reluctantly joined his father as he came close to the edge, and then stopped.
Smile was lost from Hurron's face as he realized that the birds that have been quite loud up until that moment have grown silent.
Tentatively he moved closer to the edge regaining his courage and at the same time cursing at his own moment of weakness, because for the first time in many years, he feared what he might see in the depths
      Then it happened. World exploded, and the skies went dark with flying things, not eagles, these were things not of this world, huge, much larger than a bear most of them were. They swarmed, seemingly infinite in numbers, and different Hurron saw. Hurron looked at his son who stood there with eyes unblinking, and he looked... amazed. Hurron could not believe his own eyes. Even in this moment where all the legends were coming to life, his sons look of amazement, untainted with fear, it made Hurron feel a twinge of pride. To hells with bleeding of the snow, his son was a brave man, and no ritual of old could prove it more than this moment.
      Hurron stood by his son and he stood tall as fire bloomed from the deep and a beast of unimaginable size rose before them. A red monster crowned with horns that put to shame the greatest elks antlers. Its skin glistened like jewels.  A scaly terror that wielded limitless power stood before them, watching them, studying them.
      Father and son stood at the worlds end looking into the eyes of the beast. Then Gammur, driven by some deep understanding, bowed before the beast, and Hurron, seeing this followed his son's example
      Beast observed them in silence as the smaller ones, mere children in comparison swarmed, darkening the skies. Moment seemed to last forever when the beast opened its massive jaws and an elegant blaze of fire surrounded  Hurron and Gammur. It was a flame but it wasn't hurting them in any way, they stood there not breathing, but they could do this only so long. Hurron first inhaled the flames, his son mere seconds later.
      With fire, came knowledge, of old things, older than the world of man, things that remained separate, old world  of fire and power, and then they heard the words of the giant beast, simple speech, speech of a child, limited words but there was ageless wisdom behind them
       Hurron understood then that it was not the beast that spoke as a child, but their own minds could not comprehend more. The beast was called Barahea, the mother. He knew that, because the fire whispered to him. Fire had gifted them, and they were dragonlords from then on, the first ones, the bridge that will link the old world and new world, and from here on everything changed
Magic has entered the world
this is one of the several bonuses to first issue of ravine, of course there are illustrations following it
and here are 2 of the illustrations


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now, just like the rest of ravine , final rewrite of this will be handled by ron marz as he does have quite a bit more experience and language skills XD


and..seriously...who ever expected to see something like this in my gallery ? XD
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Kerriaa1 Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2013
Amazing ^.^
Captivating story telling gift you have, not only you draw superbly but this as well, wow ^.^
You never cease to surprise me in a very very good way ^.^
Your eloquence is remarkable considering English isn't your native language.
Thank you for sharing those gift with us mere mortals.
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orinoor Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2012
It's been a very long time since I've read a comic, but this has captured me. Beautifully told, as beautiful and compelling as your artwork.
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blackdoom Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2012
Nifty! Fear not placing more! :glomp:
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curious-zy Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2012
ooooOOOooo, the ravine. So I'm guessing this is THE Ravine?
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Shippuden23 Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2012
That story was amazing. You are a great writer :wow:
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edvalenz Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2012
your are an awesome writer
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ManOfSnakes Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
I wouldn't have excepted this from you so much letters... :iconcoolguyshadesplz:

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Rating: Good 7/10 (Didn't read in fact I just looked at the picture. :icon0u0plz:)
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TMcLeod Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
Im trying to understand. You write in prose. Then translate to comic book format and then an editor edits the prose to fit the the comic? I've tried writing in prose and then drew the pages. Its hard.
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nebezial Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2012
no, i write comic book format, for what is meant to be comic, for other things, these fun world fillers that dont influence the story but sort of add layers to the picture of the world, i use prose. thats why each issue of comic, that is about 120 pages of comic, will have about 20 pages of ..well... world encyclopaedia i guess just covering random stuff that is covered in comics , but had no need for such indepth definition as it dint have that much influence to the story
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karliosi Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
just magnificent
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